I finished my second essay draft a couple days ago. My essay is at the borderline state of sanity and unsanity, somehow. I thought the essay was all right but could definitely use some working on. Compared to the first essay. The writing is like a mountain range, with some high and low points. I thought this one was slightly more dificult.
One thing that I wasn't sure I did well enough in the essay was clearly establishing the identity that I got through the blog posts of this blog. I just decided to reveal a quirky thinker and serious literature student as the idenitites of my essay. Anyway...
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I have to say, I really enjoyed your essay. I think the idea's were quite developed and well stated. I think your label for identity fits well, but you maybe could have added something relating to this identity in your thesis to really set the point in stone. Other than that, great work! I think with my essay, I decided when they said make an argument, I really got an opinion and missed the point of the essay.. But I'll wait for more feedback. Anyways, nice work so far!
ReplyDeleteThis essay was really great! It was interesting to read and did a good job keeping my interest which is evidence of a job well done. You really seem to know where you're going with it, but I would suggest being more concrete in stating some of your ideas, felt kind of vague in some areas but overall it was a job well done! :)
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